what is wrong with this resume?

Question

OBJECTIVE:
To provide the best service that I can, with the willingness to learn and teach, so that I can do my job to the best of my ability. I am looking to obtain a position with a progressive company that will provide experience and an opportunity to succeed.

JOB HISTORY
Security Officer 02/25/2004 Until present
INTER-CON SECURITY SYSTEMS, INC
Maintains safe and secure environment for customers and employees
Duties include but not limited to the following:
Secures premises and personnel by patrolling property; monitoring surveillance equipment; inspecting buildings, equipment, and access points; permitting entry.

Monitors and responds to alarms, Prevent unauthorized entry to property through access control and apprehend violators if necessary.

Prevents losses and damage by reporting irregularities; informing violators of policy and procedures.
Completes reports by recording observations, information, occurrences, and surveillance activities; interviewing witnesses; obtaining signatures.
Maintains environment by monitoring and setting building and equipment controls. And Operate radio and other communication equipments



Security Officer Avalon Fortress Security Minneapolis, MN Start Date 02/2005 End Date 05/2007 Duties include the following list: • Parking lot patrols • Prepare written reports of all activity • Monitor facility alarm systems • Provide escorts • Perform rounds of facility • Respond to emergencies by notifying appropriate personnel • Maintain access control for visitors and employees • Ensure all CCTV and alarm systems are functional.
Mailer Trainee Star Tribune


Minneapolis, MN Start Date 04/2005 performs all assigned tasks related to the processing of newspapers and supplements in the Mailroom. Duties include: monitoring the flow of bundles from the stacker; taking lifts of supplements from pallets; operating automatic dollies and forklifts: efficiently hand-counting newspapers, supplements, etc.; and performing all Mailroom work when directed and assigned by the foreman.

Warehouse Office Depot Plymouth, MN Start Date 11/2004 End Date 02/2005 Verify and place correct number of pallets from designated areas onto trailers for safe transport to destination. Document and record items for specific destination by invoice number.

Productions Inspector Masterson Personnel
St Louis park, MN Start Date 08/2004 End Date 11/2004 I mark and sort materials according to instructions. Furthermore, I stamp the time and date of manufacture on goods and I may also record the weight and size of items. Inspect materials to make sure they meet standards and many other related duties.


Warehouse ATLAS STAFFING
Minneapolis, MN Start Date 07/2004 End Date 11/2004 this part-time position involves shipping, packing. Fastens and wraps products materials using hand tools, as well as other related works.


Lawn Maintenance
Dream Homes Development
Mpls, MN Start Date 07/2004 End Date 10/2004
Laying sod, watering grass, cutting, weeding, mowing lawn and as needed basis.

Auditor/Warehouse UPS Minneapolis, MN Start Date 11/2004 End Date 01/2004 fills sales orders per specification, ensuring that the correct items are pulled by the Customer's orders and prepared for shipping in a timely and accurate manner. Keeping the work area clean also picking and stocking of parts, mark and label containers or products using marking instruments. Loads materials and products into package processing equipment. Measures, weighs, and counts products and materials, using equipment. Warehouse

ShowPlace16
St Paul, MN
Ensuring that orders are pulled, packaged, converted, shipped, loaded and received safely and accurately; and are free from damage or defect. Putting stock away in the warehouse by hand and Will also do packaging and repackaging of product with max lifting of 50lbs?


EDUCATION Computer programming Associate Degree St Paul College


SKILLS Basic Computer Skills, Typing, word processing, tactfulness, Adaptive Skills. The ability to work well with others to accomplish a common goal and Able to handle multiple demands. I also have experience in the following positions: operating stand up forklift, general warehouse experience.

Answer 1

There is nothing wrong with it; it is just too long. It is advisable to have a resume that consists of 1 page. Try to shorten some items, you might even want to delete some (the ones that have nothing to do with the job that you are applying to). Keep only the ones that are relevant to the position you are applying. Also, look into creating a cover letter, they always make good impressions on employers (google for "sample cover letter"). Good luck!

Answer 2

Objective needs to be more specific. It should relate to the job you are applying for. It can be changed easily for different opportunities. Too many short term jobs before 2004. It sounds like you could not hold a job. You need to provide contact information for previous employers, Supervisor name, Phone # etc. Too much reading . I got bored. Maybe if you columned Place of employment, contact info. and work performed it would be easier to sort out the information they are looking for without getting bogged down in the things that they do not care about. You want to give enough info to sell your self, but remember their time is valuable and you want to make it easy for them to find what they need to know that you are the one they need.

Answer 3

Get it organized (as well as what everyone else suggested): it's too hard to quickly find info. Try columns with a header:



DATES POSITION

12.3.78 to 1.6.79 Security Officer

Westlake Security

2012 West Blvd, Westville

Duties Included: etc etc



1.04.73 to etc etc





There are maqny examples on line for you to follow.



Get rid of some strange words in your skills as well (ie: tactfulness--that's like listing friendly. That's a given).



Good luck

Answer 4

You list too many short-term jobs. At first glance, you look like a job-hopper. Eliminate the lawn service job and any others that were for less than six months.

Answer 5

objective is wordy



don't need words "start date/end date" - it's obvious what they are



This is not an essay. Don't need transition words,



Inconsistent in using phrases/sentences. Stick to phrases



If you are not presently working at the job, use past tense for verbs



Keep it to one page

Answer 6

hurry up and send the real one. With a note on a page tellin what happened. Better do it quick.