is there any grammer mistake?

Question

this is a part of my resume, will u plz tell me if there is any grammer mistake in there?
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Work experience
McDonald Restaurant July 2006- Present
( The McDonald's system is one of the largest employers and trainers of Canadians with more than 77,000 employees at more than 1,375 restaurants from coast to coast.)
Work in Window Position, which requires to take orders from customers , gathering what they have ordered , Put them in bags or trays and give them to customers, sometimes this position requires cleaning the tables in the lobby, unpacking boxes, arranging stuff and so on ...

Answer 1

My present responsibility is working at the order window, which consists of taking orders--etc etc ... Remove the capitol P from Put in bags. Try this instead---- placing the orders in containers and assisting customers to ensure their satisfaction. -

Arranging "stuff" should be omitted. " Stocking the various supplies" sounds a lot better.

Good luck

Answer 2

There are no big problems. If you want us to be picky...



I would change the first "McDonald" to "McDonald's." (You got the second one right, assuming we're talking about the Golden Arches.)



"Present" doesn't need to be capitalized.



I'd say, "Work in window position, where I'm required to take orders..." or "... which requires taking orders..."



The commas in that same sentence should immediately follow the words "customers" and "ordered," rather than after a space, and "put" should be with a lower-case p.



Start a new sentence with "Sometimes this position..."



Finally, I'd change "stuff" to "food items" (or whatever specific thing you're talking about), and leave out the "so on" part. (Nobody really knows what that means.)



I'm no resume expert, so I won't try to comment on the form, but that's it for grammar, punctuation... and so on.... :-)

Answer 3

Not really, but you do not need to capitalize the "Put" after "have ordered" in the 6 line starting from "Work experience" as it is a coma behind it , not a full stop. And, you do not need to capitalize the "P" in "Present"

Answer 4

Change the first "Mc Donald's" to match the second. Delete the word "the" before 2nd Mc Donald's. Add "I've worked" to start your sentence. Change "to take" to "taking'. Your tenses should match. Change 'put" to "putting" (lower case "p"). Change "give them" to "giving them". Put a period after "customers". Capitalize "sometimes" to begin a new sentence. Change "stuff" to "items".

Answer 5

first off, id never explain what the employer does.... you can get rid of that junk - everyone knows what they do and the reader thinks your just dumb.



work in window posistion? huh? you should write in sentance fragments but that doesn't even make sense.



how about drive thru worker? or experienced in fast-paced customer service.

Answer 6

I only got as far as your title "Is there any gammer..." (the 'i' should be a capital.