Question:
Please review this statement from my resume. How does this sound?
andreasophia
2009-06-01 17:22:24 UTC
Responsible, self-motivated, goal-oriented student with three years of office experience who performs well under pressure. Comfortable with multi-tasking, prioritizing projects and meeting deadlines. Able to produce high-quality work independently as well as with others. Long history of leadership and initiative. Highly ambitious and driven – recently elected Co-President of the Associated Students of Mills College. Accustomed to handling confidential and highly-sensitive information.
Eight answers:
Lexie
2009-06-01 17:26:26 UTC
Sounds good to me.
Bethany
2009-06-01 17:35:47 UTC
Very impressive.

This is nit-picking but you should try to get the word 'team" in there somewhere. Also, highly sensitive is not hyphenated. Highly is an adverb.

In this sentence: Able to produce high-quality work independently as well as with others, you don't need 'high-quality'. Try re-writing it to include team since resumes are often scanned for key words by computer.

Driven is not always considered a positive quality.
Precise
2009-06-01 17:45:00 UTC
1. I hope you're going to use some sort of bulleted list or column layout.

2. Remove the statement about being a Co-President. It is good information, but it doesn't belong here. Save it for your list of accomplishments, recognitions, and awards.

3. As well as with: just say "and in a team."



You might be interested in the article "7 Words Your Resume Needs":

http://preciseedit.wordpress.com/2009/01/27/7-words-your-resume-needs/



Finally, before you submit your resume, you might consider having it polished (for language use, organization, format, etc.).
sietsma
2016-12-13 10:53:40 UTC
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18 gibbs 20
2009-06-01 17:26:11 UTC
Reads well. Lots of affermative language and action verbs. Good job.
calisamom
2009-06-01 17:28:07 UTC
Sounds great. Maybe change "Accustomed to" to "Trustworthy with"
diamondjimp2000
2009-06-01 17:28:50 UTC
Your hired!
RoFlCoPtEr
2009-06-01 17:28:14 UTC
good


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