What do you guys think of my D.A.R.E essay ?!?

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Through out this D.A.R.E. journey, I’ve learned so many things based on drugs,smoking,and alcohol.In the D.A.R.E. program,ive learned the things that tabacco can cause . I also learned smoking marijuana a lot of problems. I learned the many things alcohol can cause.most importanly ,is how to be a good role model to those who drink , smoke ,or do drugs.



In D.A.R.E. I’ve learned a lot of things that tobacco can cause.For example,tobacco effects your body’s development. Tabacco is a very intense addiction. I have learned that tobacco causes heart disease to your body. I hope that tobacco gets banned from stores.

In D.A.R.E , I've learned a lot of things that tobacco can cause.For example tobacco effects your body’s development . One of these problems are breathing problems, respiratory problems ,and so much more. Marijuana users have an increased risk of cancer. Marijuana uses short-term memory loss. It also sloes coordination and reflexes.



In D.A.R.E. I’ve learned the many things that alcohol can cause. Alcohol can damage every organ in your body. Alcohol slows down the brain and body .Alcohol can cause damage in any part of your body. If you are with others who are drinking ,there is an increased risk of injury ,car crashes , and violence. I'm glad that most teens don’t drink, and if so bodies can stop growing.

D.A.R.E. teaches you many things based on smoking, drinking, and behavior. D.A.R.E. helps us students make the right choices for each other. Smoking, drinking, and drugs can cause many problems in our life, that's why I'm not trying any of these.


My dream is to get good grades in school, and move on to a good college. If I let smoking,drinking,or drugs in my way that will ruin my dreams. I Pearla , Pledge to be drug and alcohol free for as long as I'm alive. Thanks to officer Brownman for teaching me these things. I will be a great role model to those who try smoke , do drugs , and drink.

Answer 1

Great job Pearl!



I am glad you are so passionate about what you have learned, and I am sure you will be an excellent role model for others!



You have wonderful dreams, and you should have no problem making them happen :)

Answer 2

I reviewed editted and deleted the bad sentences that didnt make sense, replaced with new better ones.



Through out this D.A.R.E. journey, I’ve learned so many things about drug abuse, smoking, and alcohol. In the D.A.R.E. program, I've learned the things that tobacco can cause . I also learned smoking marijuana causes a lot of problems. Alcohol use can also cause many problems. Most importantly, I've learned how to be a good role model to young people who are considering drinking , smoking ,or doing drugs.





In D.A.R.E. I’ve learned about the things that tobacco can cause. For example ,tobacco effects your body’s development. (How?). Tobacco is a very intense addiction. I have learned that tobacco causes heart disease to your body. I hope that tobacco gets banned from stores.



I have also learned that smoking can cause breathing and respiratory problems. It is proven that tobacco users have an increased risk of cancer. Meanwhile, smoking marijuana can cause short-term memory loss. It can also cause slowed coordination and reflexes.





In D.A.R.E. I’ve learned the many things that alcohol can cause. Alcohol can damage every organ in your body. Alcohol slows down the brain and body. If you are with others who are drinking, there is an increased risk of injury, car crashes , and violence. Many teenagers lives have been lost due to drinking, but I hope D.A.R.E and education about alcohol abuse will help to prevent this from happening.



D.A.R.E. teaches you many things based on smoking, drinking, and behavior. D.A.R.E. helps us students make the right choices for each other. Smoking, drinking, and drugs can cause many problems in our life, that's why I'm not trying any of these.



My dream is to get good grades in school and move on to a good college. If I let smoking, drinking,or drugs in my way, it will ruin my dreams. I Pledge to be drug and alcohol free for as long as I'm alive. Thanks to officer Brownman.

Answer 3

You have to be at least 13 to use Yahoo Answers. If you are 13, and this is what passes for an essay at your school, I think drugs are the least of your problems.