Ohhhhhh Noooooo!! Can anyone check my Cover Letter for grammar mistakes????

Question

Please copy and paste it back to me, after you have corrected it.

Also, if you think you could make the cover letter even better, I would appreciate your help.
Dear Sir/Madam:

I have been encouraged by friends to contact you concerning possible openings for a Sales Representative. After reviewing your company brochure, I am confident that I can be an asset to your company and would appreciate your reviewing the enclosed resume that depicts my sales characteristics and skills.

Accepting challenges is the foundation of my life experiences and something I do with confidence. You will find me a totally committed individual with pride in being direct, spontaneous and communicative. I can maintain records, perform numerical calculations with accuracy and I need little direction to complete assigned tasks. These are the qualities that make an excellent Sales Representative.

From past experiences and education, I have acquired persuasive techniques that are needed to influence customers in making choices. My leadership skills are developed and have allowed me to spontaneously interact with people from all walks of life. I am a motivator and organizer and these skills have enabled me to effectively defuse problem situations with customers using tact, thus creating a long-term client base. Teamwork is another skill I have acquired and one I know is necessary for organizational cohesiveness. Over the years, I have had to establish daily operational bases for projects/programs and provide the direction to insure the progress and deadline were met.

I would appreciate the opportunity to meet and further discuss my qualifications, and any sales positions that you might have. I also look forward to hearing from you in the near future, thank you in advance for your consideration.

Yours Sincerely,

Answer 1

As someone who regularly recruits I would say the following:



Firstly, phone up the HR department and check if the company concerned accepts speculative applications, and if so, find out the name of the person the letter should be addressed to. That's a nice touch and shows initiative and enthusiasm. Oh, and lose the reference to your friends; it looks as if you can't make decisions on your own.



Dear *insert title and surname*



Re: Sales Representative vacancies



After x years in my current position, I am seeking a fresh challenge in the sales field, and having read your company brochure I am confident that I can be an asset to your company. I therefore enclose my resumé for your consideration.



Accepting challenges is the foundation of my life experiences and something I do with confidence. You will find me to be conscientious, adaptable, and a quick learner with excellent organisational and communication skills. I can maintain records, perform numerical calculations with accuracy and I need little direction to complete assigned tasks. I can work to tight deadlines and alone, on my own initiative, or as part of a team. With extensive management experience I am a skilled motivator and have well developed leadership skills.



From past experiences and education, I have acquired persuasive techniques that are needed to influence customers in making choices and can deal effectively with people from all walks of life. Over the years, I have had to establish daily operational bases for projects/programs and provide the direction to ensure that tasks were completed as required and to the deadline.



I would welcome the opportunity to meet you at your convenience to discuss the above and any suitable openings you may have.



Thanking you in advance



Yours sincerely



xxx



tel: xxxxxxxxx (best give a cellphone number, if that's what you can be contacted on most easily)



Good luck!

Answer 2

Dear Sir/Madam:



I have been encouraged by my fellow friends and collegues to contact you concerning possible openings for a Sales Representative. After reviewing your company brochure, I am confident that I can be an asset to your company and would appreciate your reviewing the enclosed resume that depicts my sales characteristics and skills.



Accepting challenges is the foundation of my life experiences and something I do with confidence. You will find me a totally committed individual with pride in being direct, spontaneous and communicative. I can maintain records, perform numerical calculations with accuracy, and I need little direction to complete assigned tasks. These are the qualities that make an excellent Sales Representative.



From past experiences and education, I have acquired persuasive techniques that are needed to influence customers in making choices. My leadership skills are developed and have allowed me to spontaneously interact with people from all walks of life. I am a motivator and organizer and these skills have enabled me to effectively defuse problem situations with customers using tact, thus creating a long-term client base. Teamwork is another skill I have acquired and one I know is necessary for organizational cohesiveness. Over the years, I have had to establish daily operational bases for projects/programs and provide the direction to insure the progress and deadline were met.



I would appreciate the opportunity to meet and further discuss my qualifications, and any sales positions that you might have. I also look forward to hearing from you in the near future, thank you in advance for your consideration.



Yours Sincerely,

Answer 3

Dear Hiring Manager, (or better yet, get the name and direct it specifically to someone)



I am contacting your company in regards to possible openings for Sales Representatives. After reviewing your company brochure, and assessing your requirements, I am confident that I have the skills and knowledge to meet your exacting standards. To that end, I have attached my C.V. for your review.



I would like to state that the willingness to accept and overcome challenges has been the basis of my life experience. I am a confident, committed individual who takes pride in my communication, organizational and critical thinking skills. I enjoy working in a collaborative environment with other team members to achieve goals and objectives.



My education and experience have allowed me to develop the techniques needed to build customer relationships and influence purchase decisions. I enjoy the interactions with internal and external clients as part of my profession.



I would appreciate the opportunity to meet with you and discuss my qualifications and your requirements in further detail. Please contact me at your earliest convenience. I look forward to hearing from you.



Best Regards,

Answer 4

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Answer 5

I think this is a very good letter.

Just a couple of points:



I would not open your intro by saying that you have been encouraged by friends to write/apply.

It sounds as if you have no mind of your own and would not have contacted the company had your friends not suggested it to you. .



You have 2 split infinitives in your letter which I,being a traditionalist,do not like. viz



to spontaneously interact

to effectively diffuse



also the bottom line of your penultimate paragraph includes the word 'insure'

the word you are looking for here is 'ensure'



Otherwise brill and G.L.

Answer 6

In your last line you write "I also look forward to hearing from you in the near future, thank you in advance for your consideration."



Between 'future' and 'thank' I would either change the comma to a semi-colon, or use the second phrase as a new sentence altogether.



Beyond that, very nice--if your resume is this great, you should get a call in no time!

Answer 7

It looks fine to me , I may have done it differently , but it shows your personality.



I would check the word > insure < and see if >ensure< is what you mean .